ive got to say, really really detailed here, can definately tell you spent loooooads of time on this, and the story is quite detailed too, interesting.
The hair i think is alright, you shouldn't beat yourself up too much about it.
reflections done well and the composition really shows the motion

.... theres not actually much critiscism i can give i think heheh

btw where is that apple logo you mentioned??
and also so far.... ive only found 1 star hehe

Hey man,
yeh too much time spent on this one haha but still not quite happy with some things here and there.

i'm glad the hair is ok to you - in the past some people have criticised me on that point (with this character).

ok the thing is I wrote most of this artist commentary like before I started work on the piece (legal mumbo jumbo, character, quotations and citations, updates...) So some of the things I've mentioned didn't make it into the final cut. These include the the competition for a year subscription (that has been 'ostponed', the apple logo, flying cars, among so many other things. I wrote it to keep me from rushing out the composition before it was 'done' (to a particular level).

But don't worry, I am gonna add the competition back in (sorry to have wasted your time on that - but hey Something may happen to your DA account at the end of this month ).

But thank you for taking the time to closely examine the piece, reading the information, and faving - I really appreciate it mate.

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no problem, hopefully within 2 or 3 weeks time i should have a few character designs, story and movie poster up... that is if i want to kick off uni with a good start hehe

OK, so i did say that i wud take a look at ur newest pic and give u my thoughts on it.
Well let me start out by saying that im am giving my flavoured yet respectful thoughts on saturday the 13th septemeber at around 9:51, now u may b asking y this wud b important well, u c it is and it isnt cos i actually havnt slept at all last night, but that is niether here nor there.
On with the review, (BEYOND) firstly wen i saw the pic in its small thumbnailish state i thought to myself this looks very interesting, and i did say i wud b honest in my comments so i clicked it to take a better look and i must say that i did look, and look, and look, i spent the better part of 10 minutes trying to take in and savour each detail that was put into the construction of this picture. well after making a few initial thoughts on the picture like the composition, and the colour, and the little extras that u put into it, i decided to read ur artists comments and find out a little bit more about "Acts of Apostates". Boy was i wrong, i did not find out a "little" bit more about it, i found out a lot. i read, and i read, and i read, and at one point i thought to myself 'i'll just write meh gud job' and be done with it. But as u may hav so evidently concluded i did not write that and hav given u a second chance.
So on to the real review, the picture, firstly i am sadened to hear that this is not a complete picture as that wud mean that this will not b a complete review, i can only comment on wat i hav seen so far. As in the picture my main focus will b centered on Jett, and with him i shall begin, i respect ur choice of non-conforming and giving Jett a unique "punk-noir" hair style rather then goin the easy route and giving him a cliched afro; jett as a whole is quite well done, the pose works for the picture in general, but i cant help but look at jetts face and think he looks more like a caveman then a highly intellegent alien species (yes i am fully aware that it isnt really jett, but u sed it is an exact replica) from wat i can c the main problem with this cave-mannish appearance is the mouth and the fact that his forehead is covered by his hair, and his eyebrows or rather lack of gives him an overbearing brow. Also becos of the size of this picture i cant c the detail in the eyes that bring ur characters to life and fill them with energy. Face aside, the clothing is pretty much wat i wud hav come to expect from you, it is a nice blend of the leather jacket and the mesh under shirt and jeans. Done with ur unique touch, it is as cn in "A hero's baptism" and "Don't" but of a higher quality and with more detail, so as i sed before it is wat i hav come to expect from u becos i knew that u wud only improve upon wat u hav alredy done before. I must admit that this is not my favourite incarnation of Jett, with his skinny tight jeans. Although the more i looked at the picture, the more i cudnt make up my mind at whether jetts legs wer just out of proportion or if u wer going for a foreshortening effect that i didnt quite get. And finally the shoes, well shoe considering that his left foot is hidden behind the glass. It looks gud cant really say much more then that.
OK the glass, im just gonna go out on a limb and say that the glass is unfinished, and as such i shall hold off on commenting on it. However; i do like the shatter effect that u hav done so far.
Onto the City, for sumone with a lack of imagination u did manage to create a really gud city. And as a city is, u hav a collection a buildings with varied height, and size. I wud hav liked to c a little more detail on the buildings to the left of the picture, but i guess u wernt really focusing on that. still its looks gud. (oh and the ghostbuster building is next to mcD's (i think))
And finally the sky, in terms of design it looks gud, the horizontal streaks of wat i assume are light give it a certain feel that lends itself to the atmosphere of the pic in general.

Well that was design, now onto colour.
Back to Jett, firstly his hair, a very bold move making his hair white, it stands out and gets him noticed, especially wen u find out that jett is black. his suit is basically the same as previous incarnations, black jacket blue mesh undershirt and blue jeans with white shoes.
In terms of colour, the city and sky come together as a whole as they work in harmony with each other by contradicting each other, the sky is bright and illuminescant, whilst the city is very dull and dark, also the fact that u chose to use the range of yellow to red for the city and sky it lends itself to the emotion of rage and/or anger, as seen from the expression on jetts face.
The artists comments are filled with detailed references, wich on one hand can easily turn people off reading anything, and thus not caring for sed character or story, and they cud c this picture and think yeah that gud, but it also proves that u hav set out with goals to achieve and a focal point to get to. However, if they do choose to read ur comments, they may be a little wiser in why the picture looks a little odd or why u chose to give a black guy a white punk hairdoo.

In conclusion I have to say that, "Acts of Apostates" gives another perspective to the Myths universe, but is that really a good thing? A reinvention of an old character, and introduction to a city never seen before. What else is there to say other then with each picture you not only improve your photoshop skills but also give more insight to the story that was seemingly never being written. And i must say that i have thoroughly enjoyed viewing the picture, reading your artists comments (however long) and also writing this essay...

Well i have been writing for over an hour now, and have given quite a bit of thought to this (so called review), I hope to hear from you soon with more insight. TTFN

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Hi there, Mr Fuastir..

Thank you, first of all, for taking the time to comment (in depth) on my latest composition.
I really appreciate your continued feedback and support. It probably would have been better for you to view it with fresh eyes rather than tired ones - there was no need to rush a 'review' out. you were not on a deadline.. But thanks nonetheless - though I can't help but think there is an implication where your condition as of writing this, affected your overall feelings toward the piece (the 'mad' comment - from you lol).

<sub>I've noticed the psychotic emoticon over your comment lol - you went through >anger and through >rage to get to that... oh dear not a good start for me then...

I'm glad the thumbnail enticed you in... This image was designed to look good at thumbnail level (as well as other levels). So I am happy about that. Thank you for taking time to absorb the image to - appreciate it.

Where did you hear/read that this piece was not 'complete'? I did not specifically say it was not complete but saying that... Don't think of my piece like a game (so subsequently review it like one - though your intentions are sound) - this is an art-piece. IMO an artist never completes anything. No composition (of mine) is perfect and so (in my case) no composition is complete - I post here for people to not only enjoy my art but for people to help me improve upon them with their 'constructive' feedback and 'encouragement'. The point is -just because something is incomplete.... does not mean your review has to be. Unlike a game my piece can be patched and patched and patched with no ill feelings - unlike in the game industry; because art is a continues WIP whereas a game (to an extent) is not.

I'm happy you like the the Jacket and uniform underneath - though try not to 'expect' things from me, just take one image at a time - I try to do that. because you may be not notice that you raise expectations of me - and that could make you get disappointed if I don't 'live' up to them lol. But I am happy you have confidence in me. Just gotta find a balance.

Hehe oh dear, you say Jett's face looks like one of a 'caveman'.. that is a bit harsh I reckon.. And because you think this you have called into question Jett's intelligence hehe (well there is no need for that bit - do you think klingons from star trek are dumb? or Huts from star wars?). You say the problem is the mouth... what about the mouth (please try to elaborate)???

You also say his hair-frown over his brow makes him look like a caveman (and so in turn making him look dumb) OK - well so everyone with a frown looks like a caveman? I respect your opinion, but this is a little mean. If I were to draw an eyebrow over the hair would that fix it? Maybe it would.. but then this is not my style.. to break the laws of realism to conform with anime or styles alike.

You must take into account, consider and understand that the one you see in the picture is smashing through a window, grimacing with pain, anger and rage (pain and anger are "primal" emotions which can only be expressed in primal ways via a humanoid face). How would you look if you were in the situation of falling out of a skyscraper, would you even be worried about how you look? would you be worried about if anyone sees you like this they might not put you on the cover of a magazine or consider your intelligence? (This links in with our other debate about someone in a poster being aware of an audience).

Saying that, look at the closeup and download it from this [link] - the fact that Jett is far away, is the reason why this closeup was provided. I am quite confident you won't feel the same way about Jett's face. But if that wont be the case - please elaborate as to why - and not just state harsh things and move on.

It is unfortunate that this incarnation of Jett is not your favourite (I wonder which is?) He's not really wearing Jeans but they appear to hug the back of his calfs don't they hehe - this is taking into account the direction of the way he is falling and his pose (notice how his left arm is longer than his sleave... this is the same principle with his legs (in particular his right leg). But do you reckon baggy trousers is the way to go? Especially for a Alpha league cop- who is not unknown to sprint after criminals? Have I ever even drawn Jett with baggy trousers? (the trousers can't be the defining factor by which this incarnation is not your favourite).

Proportions. I am telling you they are are correct, not only did I listen to your advice about them in the line-art stage.. I followed them - please don't turn around and say they are wrong... because they aren't. You can take the picture draw a red line over it to measure if that helps. The left leg is behind the right leg in terms of perspective (but this is not crazy perspective. its not like a foreground building vs a background building).

I'm glad you like the shatter effect of the glass, please do not hold off your constructive advice about how to improve the glass. Guessing they are unfinished is like saying more harsh things and well moving on...

I'm glad you like the styling of the buildings and sky. If I add more detail to the left-hand side buildings - I would subsequently need to add more to the foreground buildings, in addition to ignoring rules around perspective blur/detailing. But maybe I'll add something.. but I can't base 'subtle but major' corrections all just on one opinion. I will see what others say first.

Yeah well done for remembering where the Ghostbusters reside, you have a good memory.

The horizontal streaks across the sky are not... 'lights' or whatever, they are residual plane fume-clouds.

I'm glad you like the colour production design. reds and yellows, yes indeed, do lend themselves to primitive emotions such as rage and anger as such. It's good to hear your positivity toward that. thank you.
Do you reckon, that if one does not read the entire commentary, they will think the overall picture is 'odd'? You may have stated as to why Jett (to you) looks odd but what is odd about the piece overall? Because most of your criticism is levied at 12.5% of the picture (Jett - it's probably less than that actually, because most of your comment is on Jett's face and Jett's Hair...but) - what of the other 87.5%?

It is true that reading the commentary will give you insight behind my reasonings... but people have said they like it and (pardon my confidence) will like it regardless of reading. *Sighs* 'a black guy a white punk hair do' not everything is black and white these days man - maybe you harbour old fashioned values regarding hair - but gone are those racial hair divides lol. Hair is Hair. You do see black people with that hair style or similar - not uncommon nowadays. So I am not that bothered that one or two people are marmite haters, when the rest are lovers .

I'm glad with each piece I do, the viewer has more pieces to a puzzle. How on earth is that not a good thing? What do you mean by such a cryptic anecdote? It's not even adding another perspective... its just adding/continuing the story.

I'm glad you see improvement in my "photoshop skills" and benefit from reading the commentary - I am happy you liked reading it. I do hope you see improvement in other departments though, such as drawing. Thus overall, as an artist.</sub>



Thank you.

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Awesome work, a long wait indeed but well worth it!

thank you very much Pygar, I really appreciate your kind words - My heart rejoices at the fact that you like it enough to fave it.. thank you.

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hehe cool cool - i look forward to that. good luck with uni.

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I have nothing to say but awesome!

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